Ordos Sci-Fi Story idea

[Silver Meridoc]

(Warning: BIG STUFF)

Hey everyone.

As some of you may or may not know I'm currently enrolled as a writer at University, and i wish to practice my writing skills by working on a story. My idea, simple, i want to write a story about the Ordo Imperialis.

This piece of fiction will be based around an imaginary fire team from Cohors D, as such, I would need to make the 5-8 main characters and various officer staff. This is where everyone comes in, I’m opened to suggestions for ideas for the fire team. They could be anyone or anything, but cannot be “true” characters we already have in Ordo; you can offer a suggestion to a character and use your own personality, but you cannot suggest yourself as a character for this team. Most of the Cohors D command structure will not be noted, all that is needed is the Command, Century 1 Command, and Octet 1 command. The only true character would be Imperator Artye, but that doesn't mean other commanders can give their share of time to support the team.

The story is based around 3 phases of events. The first is mostly an introduction to the Team and their Trial by fire that leads to the discovery of an ancient civilization. Upon excavation though, the residents of this ancient bastion awaken, and are not too happy to have been disturbed. This leads to the second phase, the primary battles the Ordo commits against this new foe. As such, the Fire team that discovered it will be one of the main teams to try and figure how to stop it; this leads them below ground into the enemy bastion. In the third and final phase, the team come across a way to seal the creatures back into slumber and in hopes to stop them from killing everyone on titan, will this plan work or will it simply unleash the greater threat they may have hidden within.

The evil creatures that will be attacking are known as T’mek, they are a pirate race of species that span the galaxy searching for useful resources to assimilate into their own hive structure. Most of their technology is very advance but there is also the vast amount of pilfered tech they have acquired through their travels. They travel in massive Megaliths, giant constructs that can be the size of space stations, and carrying enough firepower to destroy a small moon. The T’mek never sleeps, they know no age, no despair, no sympathy, and they only care about keeping their species alive. Traveling vast distances in their ships, they only stop every 100 years for the “Great Rest”, landing on any nearby planet and hiding the Megalith beneath the surface of the planet. These rests last a millennium at a time, and if it should be interrupted, the perpetrators will be annihilated.

Species wise they are a kind of Dragon/Lizard species that rank themselves accordingly: The Primark, their leaders, are vastly superior to their servants, using ancient lore and technology to distinguish themselves from the rest, they usually posses strange abilities depending on their leaders character. Next come the Wa’ri, these are the elite species that command the lesser grunts, they are not as intelligent as the leaders, but they are able to learn any tactic thrown at them. Lastly the Gu’ti, these are the grunts, they are the primary fighting force, worker class, and repair class of creature. Male and female is not common among the T’mek, most of the creature is Male, but any females are rare and only held for the Primaks use, they have the same mindset as Warrior classes, but do not tend to be treated equally, they are seen only as a tool and the few queens that reproduce have the mind like a Queen Ant (Though they look like the Queen from Aliens in a sense)

Now that you know the gist of it, I hope I can get a few people to offer up some suggestions, anything works and good ideas will be put into consideration for the team, remember, 8 members of the Fire Team and 3 commanders as follows: (Note: these are just basic ideas of the team members abilities for the unit, they aren’t necessarily going to be this way if any suggestion is offered, anything that isn’t taken ill create the character for)

Cohort D Octet 1:

(Cohort Octet 1 Command) Team Leader – Duplicarius Cobalt Eviendunt

Sniper – Decurion Tanya Fennec

Heavy Weapons (Heavy Weapons Guy) – Tesserarius Douglas McGraw (Samia Perun)

Medic (Light firepower, but can tend the wounded)–

Rifleman (Greenie) –

Sapper (explosives and hacking) –

Grenadier (Close Combat Expert) –

Radio Opts (Com link) – Tesserarius ____ Name undecided (Jayce Iredell)

Cohort D Command:

Commander – CENTURION Evan Shavian

Century 1 Commander –

Other Units:

Navis Pilot –

Note: Navis pilot will be the one who pilots the primary drop ship/transport for the Fire team

(other suggestions are welcome)

So, that's what i plan to do. Remember, actual characters can make appearances, but i wont let everyone be seen since that would take away a lot of the focus in the story. I hope i can get some good feedback and support on this idea, the sooner i get everything settled, the quicker i can get started writing.

Thanks everyone

Edited February 17, 2009 by Silver Meridoc

[Agares Tretiak]

Why would this be on Titan? After all, the Ordo Imperialis is a galaxy-wide empire.

[Silver Meridoc]

Lol Necrons whut?

Not really, but the idea is similar, the differences is these guys have (or had, its unsure) a home world, and unlike the Necrons, they cannot come back once dead.

Why would this be on Titan? After all, the Ordo Imperialis is a galaxy-wide empire.

True, the trial by fire takes place on a planet nearby, but once these aliens wake up, they have their ways of finding Titan, and seeing as its the Ordos HQ, they would attack it. The thing is, during the confusion and the attack on the outpost on the planet, the T'mek take a prisoner and technology from the Ordos units stationed there, once they assimilate it, they locate Titan (by also interrogating the unfortunate Terra Personnel they caught) The Attack on Titan would be difficult because of the cold and the lay of the land, but its also to give the characters their sense of urgency on their mission.

On another note, i give thanks to Samia Perun for helping develope the first character

Heavy Weapons - Douglas McGraw

Douglas is a Grizzly bear, despite his massive girth, he is rather soft spoken, often times doesn't like to be around people he doesn't know. He has a close relationship with the world around him and despite carrying the biggest weapons, he tends to only use them when ordered. His Canteen is always filled with maple syrup (Hes Canadian) and often takes swigs from it to give him some energy in the fight.

Credit goes to Samia Peru for helping with the development of this guy

Edited February 10, 2009 by Silver Meridoc

[Agares Tretiak]

For the record, you're describing a squad, rather than a fire team. Fire teams are usually comprised of 2-3 people, and work to achieve specific objectives for the squadron. I.E Fire team Alpha Red is to take point, while Fire team Alpha Orange is to scout ahead (using the sniper, probably). Just an example.

Heavy weapons would be fielded behind the normal riflemen, because of the support orientated nature of any heavy weapon. Like... you'd keep a medic near him, because he'll be far enough away to avoid most direct combat, but close enough to offer support to the other fire teams as needed.

A Grenadier generally referred to heavy infantry who used grenades to help clear enemy fortifications and formations. These days, that designation isn't as pertinent, since every soldier carries some sort of minor explosive weapon.. If you want a CQC specialist, make him a point man or breacher.

[Silver Meridoc]

For the record, you're describing a squad, rather than a fire team. Fire teams are usually comprised of 2-3 people, and work to achieve specific objectives for the squadron. I.E Fire team Alpha Red is to take point, while Fire team Alpha Orange is to scout ahead (using the sniper, probably). Just an example.

Yeah, kinda changed it to a full team on the fly when i realized "5 is too small". I know a fire team is made up of 4-5 men per unit, and that was the original plan. But seeing how most squads on Ordo are set up 10 man, i did a quick change

Heavy weapons would be fielded behind the normal riflemen, because of the support orientated nature of any heavy weapon. Like... you'd keep a medic near him, because he'll be far enough away to avoid most direct combat, but close enough to offer support to the other fire teams as needed.

The way the formation is listed has no means to how the formation acts in the field. The heavy usually is meant to suppress the enemy and carry the most powerful weapons the team needs at the price of maneuverability and speed. Most heavies have bulky armor so they can take more punishment while their squadmates can either move around to flank or take precise shots at the enemy. The Heavy also carries Missiles to deal with enemy armor

A Grenadier generally referred to heavy infantry who used grenades to help clear enemy fortifications and formations. These days, that designation isn't as pertinent, since every soldier carries some sort of minor explosive weapon.. If you want a CQC specialist, make him a point man or breacher

True, a grenadier ususally is armed with an Grenade Launcher attachment to their weapon, but for this case, the Grenadier indeed carries grenaded weapons, but also is skilled with CQC. Breaching and even clearing a room is his job and using his GL weapon and hand grenades to dish out disruptive explosives to the enemy will more then bring him in close once those grenades take down most of them. I actually have a few ideas for one, but like i said im still waiting for others to submit their own

Edited February 12, 2009 by Silver Meridoc

[Jayce Iredell]

Just remember that the higher the soldier's rtank, the more level headed they are. (This is usual, although there are instances where some hot heads slips through the cracks.) The point you will want to stress with the unit as a whole is each individual soldier is different, their survival response though ingrained through training, will not make them a cyborg when in combat.

For example: Subordinate A has served many long years under the guidance of Superior B for many years. One engagement Superior B throws himself in the way of a rpg and saves Subordinate A, who gets to watch as Superior B's head rolls to a stop next to his feet, staring straight up at him. How will this affect Subordinate A, both when in theatre, and after they return from it? How will Subordinate A deal with what comes afterward, and how will it affect his choices in the future?

This is all interpersonal character stuff, but its what makes people feel attached to those in the story, and often thats what readers really want without it getting too complex.

[Silver Meridoc]

Just remember that the higher the soldier's rtank, the more level headed they are. (This is usual, although there are instances where some hot heads slips through the cracks.) The point you will want to stress with the unit as a whole is each individual soldier is different, their survival response though ingrained through training, will not make them a cyborg when in combat.

For example: Subordinate A has served many long years under the guidance of Superior B for many years. One engagement Superior B throws himself in the way of a rpg and saves Subordinate A, who gets to watch as Superior B's head rolls to a stop next to his feet, staring straight up at him. How will this affect Subordinate A, both when in theatre, and after they return from it? How will Subordinate A deal with what comes afterward, and how will it affect his choices in the future?

This is all interpersonal character stuff, but its what makes people feel attached to those in the story, and often thats what readers really want without it getting too complex.

True, and already i have plans for the team to face such traumatic experiences. The Team leader and Sniper have the most history behind them, and the events when they awaken the Lizards bring about their own seeds of mind pain. Seeing these millions of 4 legged arachnid like creatures pouring in relentless numbers, devouring everything in sight!

Stuff like that

You seem rather well tuned to this idea, if you want you can submit a character here, would be curious to see what you can come up with

[Silver Meridoc]

Sorry for Double Posting, but I'm just putting up a quick fragment of what I've been writing with what i have.

NOTE: This is just a rough peice to see how it may come about, as many will note, the Commander has already been done by me, but i cant go any further until i at least have a few more members for the combat team.

First Arch

The bitter Titan air nipped at the Duplicarius perched at his post in the North tower. He sighed as his lit cigarette continued to die from the frosty wind. He cursed under his breath, he dislike guard duty, especially during the late hours of the evening. He wasn’t alone though, several other Ordo Personnel lined the walls, each one walking back and forth from on their positions, each one feeling the blunt of the cold night on their fur or skin. The Duplicarius relit his cigarette, he was a modest built blue fox, standing around 5’7”, he had been with the Ordo for almost a year and already and was ranked E-7 in Terra, it was a long road, much longer then he had originally considered, but it was all earned through constant work and commitment for the Ordo. As the tobacco smell lingered around his muzzle he lifted his Tavor CTAR-21, a small bull pit assault rifle developed by Delta-One Industries, a modest weapon with good accuracy and rate of fire, shooting standard 5.56mm rounds in Burst, Semi and Full auto. On his back he had a P-90 SMG, another weapon that had been with him since his earlier days in the Ordo; not as accurate as his Tavor, it had a decent kick compared to most SMG’s. Though the Ordo had many other unique and powerful weapons, the Duplicarius preferred to stick with conventional weapons; he found that having too much firepower took away the nobility of a fair fight.

Footfalls echoed behind him as a Triplicarius and a Milites approached, the Duplicarius quickly turned and Saluted the higher ranking officer with a swift hand to his chest

“It is good to see you Triplicarius McMillian” the Duplicarius barked as the officer returned the salute, he knew this officer well. MikeMurdock McMillian, he was the one who got him into the Ordo in the first place, a level headed officer with a good conscious to boot. He had been present far longer than he had, and his rank and honors had proved it.

“At ease Duplicarius” Mike replied as the blue fox stood at ease. Like him, Mike was a fox (or a wolf…it was hard to tell) wearing an advance set of Terra Officer Armor with his name printed on the rear of the neck armor. He had a pair of glasses that gave him an intelligent look, and wore the customary officer’s cap with the Ordo cross insignia printed on the center above the lip and a long trench coat. A scarf had covered up his face and most of his chest armor, signifying that he too was at the mercy of the cold.

“Centurion Shavian wishes to speak with you” Mike replied as the Duplicarius gulped, he never liked his company commander, the fact that he was a raven was one thing, but his tendency to be brutal both in and out in combat with his men and fellow officers was something to be feared. More like a commissar then an officer, Shavian would continue to press his authority as well as keep everyone saluting to the creed of the Ordo, threatening to execute anyone caught lazing about on his watch to instill fear in his men. The Duplicarius nodded “Understood sir”

Mike nodded in return “Milites Silver Meridoc will replace you until your return” he said as a large white/grey wolf appeared at the entrance, the Dulplicarius nodded as the E-1 saluted him and took up his position.

As the pair left the cover of the wall, the frosty wind got worse as it bit again at their exposed flesh. Mike continuously lifted and adjusted his scarf as the Duplicarius tossed his butt, having finished his drag.

“Nervious?” Mike asked as the blue fox looked at him.

“You have no idea” he replied as they walked towards the massive metal blast door with the Ordo cross planted in the center in protective glass. As it eased open, the pair welcomed the warmth of the base, removing their gloves and scarf’s and placing them in their rightful pockets. Mike gave a sigh as he seemed to have taken a bite of his at some point, taking strands of fabric from his mouth in disgust.

“The Centurion wishes to meet with you in the briefing room, he didn’t tell me why, but he must have his reasons” Mike said as he escorted the Blue fox to the elevator

“Yeah, to skin me alive for a little mistake, let the fun begin” the fox thinks as the two enter the elevator

“You know, if you ask me sir, I think Shavian isn’t fit to be a Centurion” the Dupolicarius replied as he lit up again, Mike shook his head as he tipped his cap forward “it’s not wise to speak such nonsense, he earned his rank like everyone else.” The blue fox nodded, he understood that Shavian had won his rank by duty and honor, but he let the power get to his head, something he really dislike in an officer. As the double doors slid open to the lower floor hallway, the Duplicarius steps out

“I’m still OIC on Guard duty, I don’t want to be absent too long, he’s in the far left office” Mike replied as he saluted “Good luck”

The blue fox returned the salute “Thank you sir”

--

“Duplicarius Cobalt Eviendunt” muttered the raven; his black feathers were slick and fine kept as he paced back and forth in front of the sitting officer. The fox lowered his ears, he disliked his name being said in full, it reminded him too much of something he wanted to forget. Usually when Shavian did that, he had something serious to say and liked to impose his authority above any lesser officer.

“Yes sir” Cobalt muttered in an unpleasant growl; the raven grimaced a bit and looked at the fox

“It seems your actions around here have been noted rather well. Some yokel in high command had decided to give you a little assignment to work on. Personally I don’t think you are up to the challenge” he said tossing a folder in front of the fox as he took it

“Sir?”

“Don’t think I am approving this, but it seems your selected for a Trial by Fire, the Imperator wishes to see how well you can serve as squad leader, and he has a team selected for you to partake in a simple recon operation”

Cobalt studied the documents, apparently someone had discovered an unusual craft on the Planet Delphie, a rather barren world near the eastern fringe; one of the far off planets in the Imperium and one recently Terra-formed for habitation. Apparently some miners came across some unknown craft that doesn’t match any from the Ordo or any other military force in this system. They say there is a strange energy emitting from it that caused most of their machines to go out of control. Command needs you to go and investigate, along with you and your squad, some units from Cohort C and B will assist in the operation. According to the info, your mission will be to secure the area and await arrival of expedition team to study the craft.”

Cobalt nodded; there were a few sketchy pictures the miners had taken of the craft. From what he could tell, it was a gigantic star ship, though most was covered within the rock-bed of the mine, a single boom from the main section was revealed and stretched far down the tunnel. It was a beige/brown color, similar to sand stone, and numerous iconic runs labeled the sides; it reminded him of an Egyptian item by the color and the amount of gold used for the runes and details.

As Cobalt closed the folder, the raven looked at him

“I don’t want to see you go on this mission, I don’t think you’re ready for it, but for some reason the Imperator himself wishes you go.” The raven scoffed, he knew the Duplicarius had many friends in high ranks, it wasn’t any doubt that some may have put his name forward for this operation. He grumbled as he turned his back to him

“You have your orders, now get out” he barked as the Duplicarius stood, saluted and left.

Edited February 13, 2009 by Silver Meridoc

[RazorFox]

For realism's sake, introduce a plot element whereby two male characters fall in love with each other and explore their love of EGL cross-dressing together in a whirlwind romance that lasts for all of 20 minutes.

[Silver Meridoc]

For realism's sake, introduce a plot element whereby two male characters fall in love with each other and explore their love of EGL cross-dressing together in a whirlwind romance that lasts for all of 20 minutes.

I know you outrank me, but unless you have something useful to say...well you get the idea sir

As funny as it sounds, no....im trying to keep this serious, but if you want me to do something like that, dont be afraid to toss me an idea

Anyway, for just an idea, here's an excerpt of a future section

Cobalt wasn't sure of these miner folk, they had been rather helpful for the past few yards, be he was running out of time. The Ordo on Titan were being hit hard, he needed to get moving, having traveled through their underground tunnels for what seemed hours now. As he walked with the mining party, he suddenly grabbed the shoulder of the lead miner

"I need to get moving now!" he barked, as the miner stopped and turned, slowly removing the helmet of the suit, it reviled she was a female panther.

"I know you need to get moving, that's why were taking you our way"

"Your way?" Cobalt replies

"Indeed" she replied with a rather sinister grin. Nodding slightly, the two miners from the rear moved forward and slowly moved aside a large boulder before them. As it moved aside on its hidden rails, Cobalt could see just what the panther girl meant; inside were several bikes of sorts, they didn't match any of the Ordo type of vehicles, their design was far sleeker then what he had seen. The bikes composed of one large tire in the front sealed with a special bumped cover to have better traction on the sand. Its body was like a dart with two fins on both the left and right of the sealed cockpit. The rear composed of a tread unit, similar to a snowmobile, but atop it was a rather large gun. Cobalt blinked as he walked over to one, it was covered in dust and sand, and by the look of the material, were very old.

"Sand Skimmers, these are old babies, but they can handle better then any of your Ordo stuff on these sands." the panther girl noted as she patted Cobalt on the back "Hop on"

The sudden burst from the rock cave into the open desert sun caused Cobalt to shield his eyes, he had been seated behind the driver of the lead Skimmer, none other then the female panther. It had dawned on him that these vehicles were single seat, the pilot needing to lay flat on their chest to drive, so as she lay on her stomach, hands gripping the handlebars, her ass was planted firmly against the fox's chest, almost into his face. The girl grinned as she caught him looking at it with some dismay "heheh sorry, but this is the only way we can take you" she smirked "You like it? just don't touch" she replied "i need my focus for this at the moment"

"Wait...at the moment!?" Cobalt stammered back, this girl was crazy! was she really trying to hit on him now!?

Suddenly there was a drawn beeping noise as the panther girl hissed

"We got COMPANY!" she barked over the primitive com talkies.

Cobalt turned his head slightly to see what she meant, 3 T'mek Velicons, fast attack creatures, had found them and were giving chase. They were ginormous, easily the size of one of the Ordo's Aggressor class mechs, wielding large fangs and claws. Like most T'mek, they looked like wingless dragons, but these hand longer, sleeker bodies with long necks and frills, possibly for more aerodynamic movement. They hissed with a deafening screech as they raced after the bikes like raptors after their prey. Cobalt gulped, he had never seen these kind before, what was worse, if they were using these on Titan...

"BRACE!" the panther yelled as she suddenly veered to the left as one of the Velicons slammed just inches in front of them

"Great, they can jump to" the panther growled

"JUMP!" Cobalt exclaimed "What CANT they do!"

"Shoot weapons" the panther replied, only to be proven wrong by the sudden explosion to her left as one skimmer tumbled in a ball of flame and slammed into a nearby rock face.

"Whoops...guess they can do that too...."

Edited February 14, 2009 by Silver Meridoc

[Aryte]

Pay Zrazor no mind, haha.

[Kristian]

I wonder who the example for the evil centurion was.

This is a great story so far Silver. Keep up the good work!

Also, the name cobalt is also the name of someone that got ejected from ordo because of a little incident once but that's me being knit picky for the sake of having to find something to comment on. I love it so far.

[Silver Meridoc]

I wonder who the example for the evil centurion was.

This is a great story so far Silver. Keep up the good work!

Also, the name cobalt is also the name of someone that got ejected from ordo because of a little incident once but that's me being knit picky for the sake of having to find something to comment on. I love it so far.

Actually Centurion Shavian was my idea. The name was given to me by a good friend of mine at school when i asked "Whats a good name for a commander" and thus, Shavian was created. I decided to make him the real "Bastard" CO, the hard boiled, stick-up-his-ass, flaunting commander who likes to push everyone around and splay his authority like flowers. He does have his good points, hes a very skilled Close combat fighter and wields a special weapon which shall be reviled in time. He also carries a bolt pistol which has been master crafted for him.

Upon thinking this i said, "What kind of species" and that's when i decided upon a Raven, why? i guess i just wanted to create a bird character, haven't actually made one since i started writing or drawing.

I'm glad you enjoy it, but i wont be able to go any further without finishing the team, if by next weekend no one submits character ideas, ill have to take it all solo which will not only put a lot of pressure on me, but also it will take much longer because my Winter semester will keep me much busier then i am with my fall stuff.

SO PLEASE submit ideas, anything is good and all options are available, take a position, write a character idea and either tell me on SL, IM here, or Post it in this topic

[Jayce Iredell]

You seem rather well tuned to this idea, if you want you can submit a character here, would be curious to see what you can come up with

Ok so here is my thought, the Cohorts new blood of sorts.

Character name: (It is really up to you.)

Age: 18

Gender: Male

Species: Anthropomorphic Bat

Height: 5'10"

Weight: 180

Occupation: Imperial Order Soldier.

MOS: Signal Operations (Communications, aka Radio.)

Rank: Milites (E-1)

Appearance:

A bat of obvious naivity and youthful inexperience the young fox's fur was a dusty crimson colour, atop a build that was more stocky than slim. Training having made him buff enough to be siomething to look at without armour on. Hair was kept impecably short due to regulations and his eyecolour was unknown to most anyone, save the Cohors medical officer.

Clothing: For the sake of uniformity little about him sets him apart from other than the communications equipment he carries. The young todd also wears a unique visor like mask, a neon metallic yellow/green visor, worn accross the eyes and the bridge of his nose. From there an opening in the mask allows his muzzle to potrude, while metallic plates cover only the cheekbons leaving the jaw uncovered.

Skills and abilities: Obviously our Bat is a tech junkie, operating most if not all comms equipment for teh standard terra Cohort. He is an average shot with standard assault weapons, though he is forced due to weight restrictions to carry a carbine or SMG. He can hear, like all of his batty kind, on an ultrasonic level, with the drawback of being nearly blind when in open light. (hence the visor).

Personality: The young bat does not come off as someone that is easily sociable, although this is not due to being a loner. Introverted and shy, the Bat prefers to be approached by others, and normally keeps quiet unless he has something important to say. When he does speak, it is polite and intelligible. Though he has yet to face front line stationing, and for that fact, actual combat, he is compassionate for his fellow terra brothers, though only being new. Displaying a myriad of potential, his naive nature to the truth about the horrors of war, is yet to be tested.

[Kristian]

I'm basing a character of the RP behind my own character for you.

My favourite character in stories and also the RP i have behind my own character or at least aspire to have is the calm and very experienced officer that doesn't prefer to be loudmouth about his accomplishments but only hopes that the war will eventually end and that none of his subordinates will have to go through what he had to go through in his youth. He doesn't talk about the past, not the dark and not the good parts. He is a sort of father figure for his men and there is a slightly mysterious cloud among him that deserves respect. He can be as well deadly as caring. No one really knows what he has been through people can only assume that something dramatically has happened that has resulted in him dedicating all his life and experience to the service of the imperator to get his revenge for something that is completely unkown to his comrades and subordinates.

Well as a dramatical event that not necesarrily applies to my character is that his wife and son/daughter got killed in the first large grid war. This filled him with the thirst for revenge. He signed up for the Ordo ,with no other goal in his life to serve the imperator and eventually bring justice to the ones that took his loved ones. He has served with the Ordo for many years and has climbed up through the ranks to eventually becoming Centurion ( based off my character again). The men serving under his command remind him of the age his son was when he got killed and while he can't really prevent them from going in to the battle he cares a great bit about them. He is extra harsh on training them because he knows that their superiority on the battlefield is the only way to survive.

This summarizes the RP behind my character Kristian Kit

Whether i've succeeded in that RP is a totally different thing.

[Silver Meridoc]

Ok so here is my thought, the Cohorts new blood of sorts.

Character name: (It is really up to you.)

Age: 18

Gender: Male

Species: Anthropomorphic Bat

Height: 5'10"

Weight: 180

Occupation: Imperial Order Soldier.

MOS: Signal Operations (Communications, aka Radio.)

Rank: Milites (E-1)

Appearance:

A bat of obvious naivity and youthful inexperience the young fox's fur was a dusty crimson colour, atop a build that was more stocky than slim. Training having made him buff enough to be siomething to look at without armour on. Hair was kept impecably short due to regulations and his eyecolour was unknown to most anyone, save the Cohors medical officer.

Clothing: For the sake of uniformity little about him sets him apart from other than the communications equipment he carries. The young todd also wears a unique visor like mask, a neon metallic yellow/green visor, worn accross the eyes and the bridge of his nose. From there an opening in the mask allows his muzzle to potrude, while metallic plates cover only the cheekbons leaving the jaw uncovered.

Skills and abilities: Obviously our Bat is a tech junkie, operating most if not all comms equipment for teh standard terra Cohort. He is an average shot with standard assault weapons, though he is forced due to weight restrictions to carry a carbine or SMG. He can hear, like all of his batty kind, on an ultrasonic level, with the drawback of being nearly blind when in open light. (hence the visor).

Personality: The young bat does not come off as someone that is easily sociable, although this is not due to being a loner. Introverted and shy, the Bat prefers to be approached by others, and normally keeps quiet unless he has something important to say. When he does speak, it is polite and intelligible. Though he has yet to face front line stationing, and for that fact, actual combat, he is compassionate for his fellow terra brothers, though only being new. Displaying a myriad of potential, his naive nature to the truth about the horrors of war, is yet to be tested.

Thats some good info, ill defently see if i can fit him in. There is still an open spot for Radio opts so ill put him there, though i still would prefer in the future if people make the names themselves.

I'm basing a character of the RP behind my own character for you.

My favourite character in stories and also the RP i have behind my own character or at least aspire to have is the calm and very experienced officer that doesn't prefer to be loudmouth about his accomplishments but only hopes that the war will eventually end and that none of his subordinates will have to go through what he had to go through in his youth. He doesn't talk about the past, not the dark and not the good parts. He is a sort of father figure for his men and there is a slightly mysterious cloud among him that deserves respect. He can be as well deadly as caring. No one really knows what he has been through people can only assume that something dramatically has happened that has resulted in him dedicating all his life and experience to the service of the imperator to get his revenge for something that is completely unkown to his comrades and subordinates.

Well as a dramatical event that not necesarrily applies to my character is that his wife and son/daughter got killed in the first large grid war. This filled him with the thirst for revenge. He signed up for the Ordo ,with no other goal in his life to serve the imperator and eventually bring justice to the ones that took his loved ones. He has served with the Ordo for many years and has climbed up through the ranks to eventually becoming Centurion ( based off my character again). The men serving under his command remind him of the age his son was when he got killed and while he can't really prevent them from going in to the battle he cares a great bit about them. He is extra harsh on training them because he knows that their superiority on the battlefield is the only way to survive.

This summarizes the RP behind my character Kristian Kit

Whether i've succeeded in that RP is a totally different thing.

Sadly, i said i wouldnt put characters that are already in the Ordo, you have to make a bio type thing like others had before, Name, age, species, etc etc, that way it makes it a bit easier for me to adjust the character and send him/her into the story

Edited February 17, 2009 by Silver Meridoc